Is this alright? just a sample for friend?

Taken out of context it's creepy. If it's in line with the book and she is a psycho chick then it's pretty decent. Obviously if your friend thinks it's creepy she feels it's out of line with her book or maybe she thinks your capable of it or something. I don't particularly know what you expected as an answer, other then self gratification of how twisted you think you can be when it could be way more twisted...